Para-amnesia

[asakiyume]

Para-amnesia

I woke, and even recognizing the room
Didn't know where I was
Even repeating my name
Didn't know who I was.
I wandered down a path
Familiar only as dreams are
Whose next turn I could not predict
Though when I found myself
At last at a seashore
Of round gray stones,
I nodded, sure
That this was my destination.

Comments

[b-oki.livejournal.com]

beautiful.

and what a better place to find oneself :)

[asakiyume.livejournal.com]

Your comment prompted me to reread the poem and make a little tweak. Thanks for reading!

[b-oki.livejournal.com]

love all your writings! thanks for sharing :)

i want to write more than haiku, but my time has been limited and i'm mentally exhausted. maybe i should just write about how i got this way! haha :))

[asakiyume.livejournal.com]

Your haiku were always beautiful, but now they're really stunning. Really, each one you write takes my breath away. You've really got the knack for capturing a small thing, the essence of it.

But I wish you could reclaim the energy you need for other writing, if you want it! ... I sometimes am too tired to work on stories by the end of the day, so I have an inkling of what you're experiencing. For me, I think it helps to do the writing earlier--but that's not always an option if work or other obligations interfere.

[b-oki.livejournal.com]

thank you for your kind words. i'm glad my haiku have touched you.

my mind gets so overloaded that i guess its easier for me to look outside my mind to capture a small thing than to look inside to capture deeper writing. not sure even that makes sense :)

a dream i had the other night has been on my mind. maybe i need to get that out in text?? i will give that a try. better than the housework i should be doing!

[asakiyume.livejournal.com]

Do try!

And I know what you mean about sensory/emotional overload. Me too. That's why I like talking in stories or in poetry rather than relate actual facts. Yeah, I completely empathize.

[mguibord.livejournal.com]

"Familiar as only dreams are"
I loved this line. You have captured something so lovely and fleeting here.

[asakiyume.livejournal.com]

Do you find it too--that there is a certain familiarity you can have with a dream-place or a dream-feeling or a dream-creature that you don't have with any waking type of thing?

[mguibord.livejournal.com]

Yes I find this as well. There is a "normalcy" to the strange places one finds oneself in dreams. I also feel sometimes in a dream as if I am within a truer version or expression of myself than I am in a waking state. I can't express this feeling well. I am more "me" in a dream.

[cucumberseed.livejournal.com]

And clearly it was.
It may just be the dreams I was having, but I felt a hint of menace lurking behind it.

[asakiyume.livejournal.com]

That shore, in my mind, is not so much menacing as desolate and Ultimate.

[bogwitch64.livejournal.com]

(I gave you these sparkles because they're called, "mermaidy." It fit!)

[asakiyume.livejournal.com]

It really looks like the sun on water--neat!

[snakypoet]

I was nodding with you at the end, at the rightness of being there.

[asakiyume.livejournal.com]

Thank you <3

[pjthompson]

love it.

[asakiyume.livejournal.com]

<3

Thank you

[deponti.livejournal.com]

Truly lovely words. I just hummed them to music...they sounded wonderful.

[asakiyume.livejournal.com]

I'd love to hear the tune.

[deponti.livejournal.com]

Made a quick recording...

http://deponti.livejournal.com/706567.html